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The phone was ringing. Cliff was sitting in the hall on the straw chair that was never meant for sitting on. He was covered from head to toe in my blood and needed a bath.
I turned my head to look out the living room window. I could see the sun rising over our neighbor's house. The morning light illuminated my distorted body on the hardwood floor.
I turned back to watch Cliff again. "Someone should get the phone," I said.
He looked at me for the first time in hours. A single tear slipped down his face. He nodded and walked to the kitchen.
"Hello... Yes... OK... Good-Bye."
He reentered the hallway with his jacket on. "I have to go to work," he said.
"Don't forget to wash up."
"Do you want pork chops tonight?"
"Yes, that would be nice."
After he left, I lay in a pool of my own blood wondering how I was going to clean up this mess.
Date Written: July 02, 2005Comments:
Author: Klause Muppet
Average Vote: 2.875
07/14/2005 Will Disney: what - wait. i'm going to figure out where all that blood came from!
07/14/2005 TheBuyer: sloughed uterus lining probably.
07/14/2005 The Rid: So did the tear go unnoticed by Cliff? The narrator certainly noticed it.
07/14/2005 anonymous: Unnoticed by Cliff.
07/14/2005 The Rid: Yeah. Clumsy.
07/14/2005 qualcomm (3):
07/14/2005 Mr. Pony (3.5): I didn't notice it. Maybe that's what the narrator meant.
07/14/2005 The Rid (2): The nonchalance of the whole thing I find off-putting, and the scenario I find uninteresting.
07/14/2005 Klause Muppet: The poor poor woman. Good thing times have changed.
07/14/2005 anonymous: Rid-baby, I was aware of the "unnoticed" so it wasn't "clumsy". Perhaps you meant "unclear"?
07/14/2005 The Rid: Just because you're aware of the "unnoticed" doesn't make it "clear." You're the writer, for Christ's sake; I hope you know the tear is there. The narrator is aware but Cliff is not, making it clumsy. And for that matter, unclear. So you're half right.
07/14/2005 TheBuyer: author, the rid is right he's just being a jackass about it. the whole tear thing in it's entirety is out of place and doesn't work for this here reader.
07/14/2005 qualcomm: i thought "unnoticed" was a bit clumsy but it was completely obvious what the writer's intention was.
07/14/2005 qualcomm: i have a much bigger problem with "light broke through the glass"
07/14/2005 The Rid: qualcomm, nice observation. I hadn't realized how awkward that phrasing was until now.
07/14/2005 The Rid: Thanks, Buyer. I can always count on you to take the leap to "cunty."
07/14/2005 Dylan Danko: Yes, Qualcomm, absolutely splendid observation!
07/14/2005 TheBuyer: Rid, I was defending you. I always tease the girls I like.
07/14/2005 qualcomm: thank you, thank you. i'm full of terrific observations. my thoughts are a gas.
07/14/2005 Mr. Pony: Wait, what country is TheBuyer bringing the leap to?
07/14/2005 The Rid: TheBuyer! I misjudged you! Apologies. Must have been the jackassedness.
07/14/2005 qualcomm: holy shit are my observations on point!
07/14/2005 Nigel Griffiths: Oi'd loi'k teh fahk yeh'awl wheah yeh gao peewpee from.
07/14/2005 Partytime (3): Women Unite. Take Back the Night!
07/15/2005 TheBuyer: Wow Klause, this is a departure for you, eh. I can say that because I've seen you put on wigs and pretend to kiss other men.
07/15/2005 Klause Muppet: Dude, it took me 3 weeks to research this role.
07/15/2005 Litcube: Whoah.
07/17/2005 Litcube: Klause must have Benny'd this, because don't see any trace of the criticisms mentioned within the comments below.
07/18/2005 Klause Muppet: If by "Benny'd this" you mean slept with 2 bi-curious woman than yes, yes I did.
07/18/2005 Mr. Pony: How the hell did you hear about that?