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Date Written: August 20, 2004Comments:
Average Vote: 3.5
08/26/2004 Will Disney (4):
08/26/2004 John Slocum (3):
08/26/2004 Mr. Pony (3): Strange that the short on the guest page is so similar! I liked the cheery tone of this one, but the sheer implausibility of the activities hurts it quite a bit. There's something "schoolyard" about throwing someone into a particle accelerator, and it makes the exercise silly and cartoony. 2.666667
08/26/2004 anonymous: Although perhaps unsuccessful, my intention was to garner laughs by making the list go on much longer than one would normally expect. Sort of like the Austin Powers gag where he urinates for two minutes... and then urinates some more after a pregnant pause. The escalating implausibility of the torture was meant to emphasize this: the list goes on too long, and the abuse goes too far, even to the point where the victim is still alive for some time after being thrown into the accelerator.
08/26/2004 Mr. Pony: It's easy to forget how long that scene really is. That's my favorite example of something that starts out funny, gets stale, and then becomes funny again; not because it changes in any way, but because you begin to understand the writer/performer's fanatical dedication to such an idiotic joke.
08/26/2004 anonymous: yes
08/26/2004 TheBuyer (5): 5 for the same reason I still laugh every time Leslie Nielson deadpans a fart; it just goes on forever past the point of already funny. Any less would have been a cop-out. Also, I like the attention paid to formatting to keep this letter a single page.
08/26/2004 Litcube (4): The idea was good. That formatting **REALLY** helps this out, though, doesn't it, TheBuyer? Doesn’t it?
08/26/2004 TheBuyer: Dude, if only Espion was a Memo.
08/26/2004 TheBuyer: *were* a Memo
08/26/2004 Mr. Pony: You mean instead of a Pokémon.
08/26/2004 Dick Vomit (4): Anyway, Action item 14 is what makes this stellar.
08/27/2004 Jon Matza: Hmmm...clever/original premise, seamlessly executed, yet something's not "working" for "this" reader. I've been struggling to put my finger on what it is. Suffice it to say I feel like I just ate a 3-piece Popeye's Spicy Leg and Thigh Meal (chicken and biscuit only) but never received the biscuit. My guess is some of this short's original lustre was lost as a result of over-polishing.
08/27/2004 mr.coffee (2): good idea...shitty execution.
08/30/2004 Benny Maniacs (3): It's good to see The Ole' Summer Sauce making art that has a secretary's cubicle feel to it.