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Boxcar Willies

Guys from the farms. Other fellas, rough lookin, unkempt men. Bandits and drinkers. Packed tight like sardines sittin down or layin out over the straw. Ain't shaved in days. Noddin from the cadence of the thing, calm like - soothing. Chica-chicoo-chicachicoo-chica-choo-chicchicoo. Harmoincas. Aww fellas, it's gonna be another long night.

It's a tough life, crossin this big country, ridin the rails. I daresay none of you would choose it, nosir.
Unless you're into hoboerotic.
Date Written: June 10, 2004
Author: TheBuyer
Comments:
06/10/2004 qualcomm: i'm torn on this. everything up to the last sentence was pretty good, you ask me. but man, that last sentence. aw man. 3.5, rounded down in the name of cutthroat tourney politics.
06/10/2004 Jon Matza (2): Seems like author wanted to do a twist on 'car' concept by making it a railroad car. Having decided this, he found himself trapped in a cumbersome concept w nowhere to go. Additional points off for the feeble pun at the end.
06/10/2004 qualcomm (5):
06/10/2004 qualcomm: disney, i voted wrong for this one, as you can see from my first comment. oops!
06/10/2004 scoop (3):
06/10/2004 Will Disney: sorry, lerpa, i don't have admin stuff built into the tourney yet. next time!
06/10/2004 Will Disney: who told you to vote wrong?
06/10/2004 Will Disney (3): right down the middle, this one...
06/10/2004 Mr. Pony (4):
06/10/2004 Moe-Ron (4): The last line made me LOL. Which probably makes me stupid.
06/10/2004 TheBuyer (4): more beans.